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10-19-2011
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کاربر فعال
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نقل قول:
نوشته اصلی توسط KHatun
Hmmm
I was thinking suddenly a nice plot emerged from a crappy idea
haha
I've written this much of it, I'll keep it a secret with Saba if it sounds good
they should have chained me. when you're chained you easily feel repressed.
you start to blame others.you start to think you would be better off without them
and you don't feel guilty
but when you're literally free, you start to blame yourself for letting them down, and that my friend is worse...too damn worse!
p.s so?! :D
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I am so sorry dear but i didn't get it
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:let's continue
The first awful posibility was that the one thing i cared about most in the whole world could have been taken from me by the exact same person that was the last person on this whole planet whom I wanted to have it.
After all these years trying to protect it from specially him (or her) even the idea was enough to kill me not to mention the consequenses
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I know that in the morning now
I see ascending light upon a hill
Although I am broken, my heart is untamed, still
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کاربران زیر از Saba_Baran90 به خاطر پست مفیدش تشکر کرده اند :
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10-20-2011
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کاربر فعال
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تاریخ عضویت: Jun 2011
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نقل قول:
نوشته اصلی توسط KHatun
I've written this much of it, I'll keep it a secret with Saba if it sounds good
they should have chained me. when you're chained you easily feel repressed.
you start to blame others.you start to think you would be better off without them
and you don't feel guilty
but when you're literally free, you start to blame yourself for letting them down, and that my friend is worse...too damn worse!
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I'm sorry Khatun gian Ii've never read any of his works or I would have got what u meant
I didn't say i didn't like it i just didn't get it
I didn't know if it was to be the rest of the story or sth of ur own
But I do believe that Chains Take away the resposibilities and aside from the fact that u won't be able to do any thing, you'd still be happy that u wont let anybody (even urself) down
Oh no! wait a min!
!It was the story
OK!it's cool! it looks like after the whole ups and downs in the future of the story the narrator is still alive
I like that!At least we know that he(or she) is gonna make it through
Mine is a little dark again
I'm waiting for that secret u mentioned
:we'll continue yours
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And the whole thing is even more chalenging when u've got a to be told story a story that u feel how it worked for u every single morning
how it changed u and other peoples opinion about u
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Guys i want this to be like the main character has exprienced sth simple yet extraordianry,that has changed alot of things about him so maybe it could be a breath of fresh air to the ones who may read it
A Simple Real Life Story
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?so what do u say
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I know that in the morning now
I see ascending light upon a hill
Although I am broken, my heart is untamed, still
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10-19-2011
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مدیر کل سایت کوروش نعلینی
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تاریخ عضویت: Jun 2007
محل سکونت: کرمانشاه
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i dont want to send spam in your topic ! but you force me !
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p.s I'll give you a clue
think of Edgar Allan Poe stories
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i know what you say Khatoooon !
it refers to The Tell-Tale Heart
there is an audio book version of this story by mr Naleini ! and you Believe your voice pitch is much more better for Gothic story !
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i know dear mehregan i only want to act like you
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do u like to know how did i find PCCty? i'll write in the proper topic of:
انگیزه شما از عضویت توی فروم چی بوده!
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and know how you found pccity , i visited your blog which was created for mr.rahmani's fans about 5 years ago !
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i hope You Will Be Satisfied by "nemidoni "
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ویرایش توسط دانه کولانه : 10-19-2011 در ساعت 08:14 PM
دلیل: adding 's' to fan !
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10-19-2011
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مدیر تالار انگلیسی
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تاریخ عضویت: Apr 2008
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who's mr naleini?! i have heard his nice audio book! hahaha
it was fantastic
admin : really ? Have you heard?
nice memory, bravo
ویرایش توسط دانه کولانه : 10-19-2011 در ساعت 08:12 PM
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10-19-2011
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مدیر تالار انگلیسی
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تاریخ عضویت: Apr 2008
محل سکونت: کرمانشاه
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saba gian explain more, i didn't get what happened, may be that's because of panctuation, there is no . or , in ur text
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10-19-2011
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کاربر فعال ادبیات جهان
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تاریخ عضویت: Mar 2011
محل سکونت: کرمانشاه
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oh ok I'm depressed now, nobody liked it
actually it was something like Edgar Allan poe's stories again
as Koorosh mentioned
forget it now, maybe it can be used later on
dear mehregan I think it's turning into a psychological confession, maybe the thing which he's talking about is not a physical object but an illusion
but I'll wait for saba to give you her own answer
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کاربران زیر از KHatun به خاطر پست مفیدش تشکر کرده اند :
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10-22-2011
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کاربر فعال ادبیات جهان
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تاریخ عضویت: Mar 2011
محل سکونت: کرمانشاه
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I'm a little confused now Saba
there are two lines one is what you said about the thing that had been taken away from the guy, and the other line repeats how it changed his life
after mehregan's sentence which says I could sense things and explains how, there must come a sentence related to the robbery
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10-23-2011
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کاربر فعال
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تاریخ عضویت: Jun 2011
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Ok! you know whAt guys?We are all confused!And this whole confusion thing will go on unless we figure sth out for it!
What about the role thing we talked about?This is confusing cuz all of us playing the being the narrator
we should think of a general plot and then expand it,elaborate it, like cooardinating one another!
?what say u
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I know that in the morning now
I see ascending light upon a hill
Although I am broken, my heart is untamed, still
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10-23-2011
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کاربر فعال ادبیات جهان
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تاریخ عضویت: Mar 2011
محل سکونت: کرمانشاه
نوشته ها: 210
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250 سپاس در 115 نوشته ایشان در یکماه اخیر
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نقل قول:
نوشته اصلی توسط Saba_Baran90
Ok! you know whAt guys?We are all confused!And this whole confusion thing will go on unless we figure sth out for it!
What about the role thing we talked about?This is confusing cuz all of us playing the being the narrator
we should think of a general plot and then expand it,elaborate it, like cooardinating one another!
?what say u
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I agree. we need to make up a plot first. these kind of theme-based, psychological stories are very subjective, so it's almost impossible to expand it in a way to satisfy everyone
stream of consciousness does not accept pause
well...let's go on in this way
the guy wakes up wondering why he feels so different that day
something must have happened, for example a thing had been taken away from him, or something/someone had entered his room
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10-24-2011
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کاربر فعال
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تاریخ عضویت: Jun 2011
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نقل قول:
نوشته اصلی توسط KHatun
I agree. we need to make up a plot first. these kind of theme-based, psychological stories are very subjective, so it's almost impossible to expand it in a way to satisfy everyone
stream of consciousness does not accept pause
well...let's go on in this way
the guy wakes up wondering why he feels so different that day
something must have happened, for example a thing had been taken away from him, or something/someone had entered his room
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That's good
He could have also felt like something is gonna happen that !day,something that will change his life forever
now the Question is WHO IS GONNA PLAY HIS CHARACTER?I mean who is gonna be who?
I think u R better that us, at least that me
!SO u'd better be him or wait a min,HER
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I know that in the morning now
I see ascending light upon a hill
Although I am broken, my heart is untamed, still
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مجوز های ارسال و ویرایش
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اچ تی ام ال غیر فعال می باشد
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